假设你是红星中学高三（1）班班长李华。居家学习期间，你们班开展了一次以“自律”为主题的调研活动。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文稿件，给你们学校英文网站投稿，记述你在本次活动中发现问题并解决问题的过程。

注意：词数不少于60。

提示词：自律 self-discipline

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答案

One possible version:

While studying at home, I surveyed my class on “self-discipline”. The findings worried me a lot.

To solve the problem, I asked my parents for help, and they offered some practical advice. Then I held an online discussion with my classmates on how to well discipline ourselves. After that, we all knew better what to do.

Three months later, I did a second survey, which showed great improvements in self-discipline. I phoned my teacher about it, and we both felt very pleased.

【分析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文。这是一篇图画作文，要求考生按以下四幅图的先后顺序，就你开展“自律”调研活动中发现问题并解决问题的过程写一篇英文稿件，向学校英文网站投稿。

【详解】

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时

人称：第一人称为主

结构：总分法

     总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 表明写作主题——“自律”

2. 根据图片描写事件过程：

第一幅图片描写自己对“自律”调研结果很担忧；

第二幅图片描写自己向父母求助解决方法/建议；

第三幅图片描写自己和同学们在网上讨论如何自律；

第四幅图片描写三个月后，大家自律能力有了很大提高，我和老师很高兴。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

ask sb. for help；practical advice；an online discussion；do a second survey

第三步：连词成句

1. I asked my parents for help, and they offered some practical advice.

2. Then I held an online discussion with my classmates on how to well discipline ourselves.

3. I did a second survey, which showed great improvements in self-discipline.

(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,

6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表选择：either…or…，or

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改

【点睛】

范文内容完整，结构严谨，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了主从复合句，如which showed great improvements in self-discipline这句话中用了which引导的非限制性定语从句；使用了非常好的短语，如ask sb. for help，an online discussion，do a second survey等，为文章增色不少。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。